This girl is so quiet;
This girl is always alone;
This girl is so confused;
This girl seems boring;
This girl is nothing special.
This girl is a good listener;
This girl is a good team player;
This girl is easy to talk to though she will never be the one to start the conversation;
This girl seems unsure of herself;
This girl always seems lost in her mind;
This girl is a little different than the rest.
This girl is great at keeping a conversation going if she is genuinely interested in it;
This girl has a few close friends;
This girl is always asking questions;
This girl is always thinking about the world around her;
This girl makes you wonder who she really is.
This girl says things that make my day;
This girl is always there for me;
This girl is very curious;
This girl has a whole world hidden within the folds of her mind, I sometimes catch a glimpse of it;
This girl is outstanding.
This girl tells me about many things, her role models, her dreams and even her secrets.
This girl is full of love for those she cares about;
This girl is eager to learn new things, sometimes her curiosity even gets her into trouble;
This girl has a mind much louder than herself, she often tells me what she thinks about;
This girl is very special to me.
This girl they all speak of is me, but the truth is no one knows who I am better than myself. More often than not I find a better reflection of the person I truly am in my writing than I do in any mirror or spoken words. I have always been passionate about writing. The simple act of touching the tip of my pen to paper and creating something never failed to bring peace to my mind and soul. It always kindled the spark inside me into a warm and comforting fire that filled me with life. It is my way of expressing who I am. This blog; Secrets of the Soul, will give my readers a glance of the universe hidden within me. But don’t be disappointed, even this piece, true to its tittle definitely says a lot about me.
Dear Wajeeha,
I really liked the format that you chose for your about me I think that it was very clever. Through your about me I feel like I have a better sense of you know that I have had before.
What I would work on for you is to be more confident in your writing and be more creative because I know that you have amazing things to say and that you just need a little push to say them.
I will for sure be reading more of your pieces because I like what I have ready so far. Keep it up!
Sincerely,
Felicity
Dear Wajeeha,
It is a pleasure to read this and get to know you, as I have not met you before. I really like how you made it sound like you were talking about someone else and what they mean to you. I also like how at the end you mentioned that you find yourself better in you writing which is a great thing, because who ever that girl is that is the true you. This format was very intriguing.
Something that I would suggest is to read over certain sentences such as, “This girl has a whole world hidden within the folds of her mind, I sometimes catch a glimpse of it;” to make is sound a little better in a different way. Something that could also help is to separate the part, “this girl they all speak of is me”, because this is a strong phrase that could be stronger separate from the end paragraph.
Besides that this was a great piece and I can not wait to read more of your work in the future.
Love,
Elena
Dear Wajeeha,
I loved reading this; I really felt that I was able to get to know you better by reading this piece. It was simple yet elegant and I felt that it was really working. I especially enjoyed the feeling of quiet confidence that I sensed throughout this entire piece, it was powerful but not over the top. We don’t often speak but I felt myself relate to your writing on a number of occasions and it was very inspiring to hear this side of you.
As for improvements,it is difficult for me to pick out anything specific. I would like to maybe see it be a bit longer and to maybe just go through it a few times to check for GUMPS. Perhaps reread it to make sure it flows well as it seemed just a little bit choppy at times but that is really about it. A very well done piece overall.
Can’t wait to read more!
Sincerely,
Emily
Dear Wajeeha, I loved reading your about me and getting to know you better. Even though you are a new student to FFCA, you had made such a great first impression through your writing. The structure was clever and easy to follow throughout the piece. I thought it was very authentic and meaningful to who you are as a person. Your voice was very consistent and strong, in terms of highlighting the specific details about yourself that really are the most important and true to you.
I thought that this piece was also very well written in terms of grammar and structure, but I would suggest maybe adding a featured image or even a quote just to make this piece stand out more. With images, I think it really helps to capture the tone and mood overall.
I hope to read more from you soon, and interact with your writing, as I found this piece really relatable to my life as well. Overall, well done!
Sincerely, Simran.